Directions:

  Study the following set of pictures carefully and write an essay in no less than 120 words.

  Your essay must be written clearly on ANSWER SHEET 2.

  Your essay should cover all the information provided and meet the requirements below:

    1. Interpret the following pictures.

    2. Predict the tendency of tobacco consumption and give your reasons.

 我的习作：

                                                         No smoking for health

Smoking is one of the essential factors that threats (1) people's lives. According to the picture, 1.1 billion people, taking up (2) almost 20% of the world's population smoke. While lighting cigarettes, three million lives among (3) with 200 billion dollars are burned to ashes. Absolutely, smoking has brought great harm to people.

Fortunately, however, the tobacco consumption is gradually shrinking, from 14.3 billion tons in 1994 to 14.2 billion tons (4) next year. Such reduce may indicate the number decrease of smokers (5), or a lower average tobacco consuming (6) per person. That is really good news.

Recently, as the government strengthening the propaganda and education of smoke's harm (7) , more and more people come to realize that they mustn't treat their health, even life serious in an irresponsible manner. So people who gave up smoking are increasing, reflecting in the data of a 10 million tons amount lowing of tobacco consumption. We could believe that with people becoming more rational (8), smoking will no longer do harm to people's lives.

我的点评：

（1）threat 改为 threaten。Threat是名词，表示“威胁,恐吓,凶兆,征兆”，threaten是动词，表示“威胁，构成威胁”。这里，that从句应该引导动词，因而用名词threat不合适。

（2）去掉taking up。这里“almost 20% of the world's population”对主语“1.1 billion people”进行解释说明，是主语的同位语，仅需要保留名词性短语即可，不需要添加动词。

（3）among 改为together。这里，“three million lives”与“200 billion dollars”都属于吸烟的后果，应该是并列关系，用among with 无法表达出并列关系，应该使用together。

（4）next year 改为 the next year。“next year”表示下年，即2008年，而the next year表示上文所提到的年份的下一年，比如1995年。

（5）decrease of smokers 改为 of smokers is decreasing。该短语位于indicate 引导的宾语从句内，如果使用decrease of smokers，这个从句需要有动词，不能只有名词短语。如果使用of smokers is decreasing，从句的结构就完整了。

（6）consuming 改成 consumption。这里，“烟草消费量”是一个名词，应该用名词consumption来表示，不应该使用动名词consuming。

（7）of smoke's harm 改为 on what harm smoking can cause。用of smoke's harm，容易造成这个短语仅修饰education 的歧义，而改用on what harm smoking can cause怎不会有歧义。

（8）rational 改为 prudent。Rational意思为“合理的，理性的”，不如使用prudent“谨慎的”更符合句意要求。

修改后习作：

No smoking for health

Smoking is one of the essential factors that threatens people's lives. According to the picture, 1.1 billion people, almost 20% of the world's population, smoke. While lighting cigarettes, three million lives together with 200 billion dollars go up in smoke. Absolutely, smoking has brought great harm to people.

Fortunately, however, tobacco consumption is gradually shrinking, from 14.3 billion tons in 1994 to 14.2 billion tons the next year. Such reduction may indicate the number of smokers is decreasing, or that a lower average tobacco consumption per person. That is really good news.

Recently, as the government strengthens the propaganda and education on what harm smoking can cause, more and more people come to realize that they mustn't treat their health, even life serious in an irresponsible manner. So people who gave up smoking are increasing, as reflected in the data of a 10 million tons lowing of tobacco consumption. We could believe that with people becoming more prudent, smoking will no longer do harm to people's lives.

习作翻译：

为了健康，请不要吸烟

吸烟是威胁人类生命的重要因素之一。如图所示，11亿人吸烟，占全世界总人口的近20％。300万人死于吸烟，2000亿美元随着香烟的燃烧化为灰烬。显然，吸烟给人类带来巨大损害。

然而幸运的是，烟草消耗量呈逐年降低趋势。1994年，烟草消耗量为143亿吨。到第二年，这个数字降至142亿吨。烟草消耗量的减少显示，吸烟人口数量正在下降，或者人均烟草消费水平有所降低。这真是好消息。

近年来，随着政府不断加强对吸烟害处的宣传和教育力度，越来越多的人意识到他们不应该将自己的健康乃至生命视同儿戏。所以，越来越多的人选择戒烟，这一变化也反映在烟草消耗量的数值降低了100亿吨。我们有理由相信，随着人们对待吸烟的态度越来越谨慎，吸烟将不再是威胁人类生命的杀手。